Feedback Journal: Graduate Writing II

Name: Welling T

Week 1: Feedback Preferences

What kind of feedback would you like to receive from your instructor? On what aspect of writing would you most like to receive feedback?” TYPE YOUR ANSWER HERE

Dealers choice,

should not include “I did not read the instructions the same way you did, so marking off not based on merit of the written word but marking off based on what the audience is expecting.” I am so not a fan of that. Complete unclear instructions. Completely unclear rubric.

Although I did say dealers choice, so maybe punitive grading is the OC tool employed to force a longer more detailed response. All an OC is going to do is usually sit with the pain and get annoyed with the situation. Blocking pain is something as a handicapped person you are forced to get used to.

4 weeks of class left. Lets see how this next week does. already thinking about the “well I will likely just have to pay to take this class next time”. Since existing writing skills do not count.

How do you give me solid feedback, not using Skinner Box (OC) techniques is a good choice. All it will do is annoy me.

Use this journal to record the writing feedback you receive. Please update and submit this table by Day 7 of Weeks 2 through 5.

Date	Piece of writing (title, description, etc.)	Area where excelled	Issue to work on	Resources to review	Plan for revision / future writing *Optional:* *Questions to ask the instructor or the Writing Center*
2019 11 30	history	Technical writing	Too long, incorrect packaging for different audiences. [A1]	The guild structure	Continue to study history and different aspects of the Memento Mori human nature condition[A2] .
12 7 2019	history	Technical writing	Too long, incorrect packaging for different audiences. Differences between how I read the instructions versus the demands of my audience.	The foundation of academics	Be very much on guard regarding the illusions of “but the instructions were totally clear”. Not everyone reads the same paragraph the same way. Ignoring those facts has caused more problems in communication can be measured. That is something to think about.
12 14 2019	history	Technical writing	What is my plan to improve. I do not really have one. My thoughts are to give a description of my equation formatting for my sentences to make it easier for my audience to follow along.	mathematics	Work more on the description of my equation writing. to allow for better and better descriptions.
12 22 2019	history	Technical writing	My plan for the future. Keep writing the way I do, at this point I had dumbed what I want to say down enough. Time to raise the reading level of those around me. If you want to read it, to understand it, study. You can either make Yugo’s or a Rolls. I need to not focus on the Yugo market, I write Rolls level. I need to stop trying to undo the rolls engineering to make it into a yugo. Metaphorically speaking[A3] .	Audience acceptance	Ignore the “I cannot allow you to make me feel dumb, or allow you to achieve where I cannot achieve.” I need to ignore them and keep churning out data and information. I like what I write, if my audience struggles, that is called becoming educated. If they feel dumb, that is their job to fix not my job to make them feel good. [A4]
12 27 2019 1334	history	Technical writing	Obviously my audience will be smaller, but then again some of my ideas require deep academic dives to try and understand them. So continuing with the theme of the metaphor of a yugu. Anyone could drive them, however they had on the extreme side of limitations. My work is not a get in and drive eg a CR or an OC which can be understood rather quickly. My work requires study time.		My work it appears is only becoming more complex. In my last class I found a human universal truth sequence of behaviors. In the cultures I have studied, the pattern is individual wide and carries extremely well documented evidence going back to the start of written history. So I had to add another outline to my list of dissertation topics. The smallest one is only a 1000s words. The longest is not really one dissertation more like 2-3 in one idea. Simplifying for the mass market is someone elses job.